Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-02
review-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-02-genart-lc-dupont-2014-10-29-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 04) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2014-10-27 | |
Requested | 2014-10-16 | |
Authors | Wesley George , Carlos Pignataro | |
I-D last updated | 2014-10-29 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -02
by Francis Dupont
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Genart Telechat review of -03 by Francis Dupont (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -02 by Tobias Gondrom (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -02 by Tim Chown (diff) Rtgdir Early review of -01 by Alvaro Retana (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Francis Dupont |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 02 (document currently at 04) | |
Result | Ready | |
Completed | 2014-10-29 |
review-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-02-genart-lc-dupont-2014-10-29-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20141025 IETF LC End Date: 20141027 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 2 and 5 page 18: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 3.2.6 page 8: singaling -> signaling - 3.3.1 page 9: e.g. -> e.g., - 3.3.2.4.1 pages 11 and 12: the conclusion (Gap: None) doesn't seem very in phase with the text. Perhaps it is another case of "out of scope known gap"? - 3.4.2 page 15 (UK vs US spelling): behaviour -> behavior - 4 page 17: Identifed -> Identified - 6 pages 18 and 19, Authors' Addresses page 26: I don't like ISO IS 3166 two letter codes used in postal addresses but it seems to be what the new RFC required... Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr PS: I reviewed the 02 version but now the 03 was published so I updated my comments. rfcdiff shows 03 is better than 02 at the exception of: - in 3.3.1.1 page 9 perhaps a missing '<' as I can see: ... (see xref target="LDP"/>). PPS: it could be useful to have a checklist of all RFCs which should be updated but it is more a task for the WG than something to put in the document (I don't follow the WG so I don't know if it already exists :-).