Telechat Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03
review-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03-genart-telechat-dupont-2014-11-20-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 04)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2014-11-23
Requested 2014-10-30
Other Reviews Genart Last Call review of -02 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -02 by Tobias Gondrom (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -02 by Tim Chown (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -01 by Alvaro Retana (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review review-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03-genart-telechat-dupont-2014-11-20
Posted at http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/gen-art/current/msg10820.html
Reviewed rev. 03 (document currently at 04)
Review result Ready
Draft last updated 2014-11-20
Review completed: 2014-11-20

Review
review-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03-genart-telechat-dupont-2014-11-20

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ipv6-only-gap-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20141025
IETF LC End Date: 20141027
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and 5 page 18: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 3.2.6 page 8: singaling -> signaling

 - 3.3.1 page 9: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 3.3.2.4.1 pages 11 and 12: the conclusion (Gap: None) doesn't seem
  very in phase with the text. Perhaps it is another case of "out of scope
  known gap"?

 - 3.4.2 page 15 (UK vs US spelling): behaviour -> behavior

 - 4 page 17: Identifed -> Identified

 - 6 pages 18 and 19, Authors' Addresses page 26: I don't like
  ISO IS 3166 two letter codes used in postal addresses but it seems
  to be what the new RFC required...

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr

PS: I reviewed the 02 version but now the 03 was published so I updated
my comments. rfcdiff shows 03 is better than 02 at the exception of:
 - in 3.3.1.1 page 9 perhaps a missing '<' as I can see:
    ... (see xref    
    target="LDP"/>).
PPS: it could be useful to have a checklist of all RFCs which should
be updated but it is more a task for the WG than something to put
in the document (I don't follow the WG so I don't know if it already
exists :-).