Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06
review-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06-genart-lc-yee-2017-09-01-00

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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-09-01
Requested 2017-08-18
Other Reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -05 by Tony Przygienda (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -06 by Tim Chown
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Reviewer Peter Yee
Review review-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06-genart-lc-yee-2017-09-01
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/EpgQGl0DkI2DIVzg1vrICflQltM
Reviewed rev. 06
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Last updated 2017-09-01

Review
review-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06-genart-lc-yee-2017-09-01

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ldp-mrt-06
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2017-09-01
IETF LC End Date: 2017-09-01
IESG Telechat date: 2017-09-14

Summary:  The draft is ready for publication after correcting some minor issues.

Major issues:  None

Minor issues:

Page 3, section 3, IBR definition: the definition give here appears to be a duplicate of the one given for IN.  Copy the correct definition from RFC 7812 instead.

Nits/editorial comments: 

Page 3, section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: append a comma after "e.g.".

Page 8, section 4.4., 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: delete duplicate "on".

Page 8, section 4.4, 2nd paragraph, 4th sentence: change comma after "computations" to a period.  

Page 9, section 5.1.1, 4th paragraph, 2nd sentence: the construction "red(blue)" is used without defining what it means exactly.  From the context, it isn't quite "red or blue".  An explanation of the meaning of this construction should be given.  I'm assuming it means something like use "red" in the sentence in all cases or use use "blue", but don't mix them.  There's also red/blue used later in the document which muddies the point.

Page 10, 1st full paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "foll" to "follows:".

Page 11, section 5.2.2, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the period after "A.1.7".

Page 12, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence: consider deleting "how".

Page 13, 2nd paragraph after numbered list, 1st sentence: append "to" after "respect".

Section titles for 5.2, 5.3, and 7: append a space after "RFC" to separate it from the number.  The spaceless form should only be used for references enclosed in brackets.