Early Review of draft-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11
review-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11-rtgdir-early-jia-2016-12-09-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-residence-time
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 15)
Type Early Review
Team Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir)
Deadline 2016-12-22
Requested 2016-11-22
Draft last updated 2016-12-09
Completed reviews Rtgdir Early review of -11 by He Jia (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -12 by Robert Sparks (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Benjamin Kaduk (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -12 by Jürgen Schönwälder (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -14 by Benjamin Kaduk (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -13 by Robert Sparks (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -14 by Robert Sparks (diff)
Assignment Reviewer He Jia
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11-rtgdir-early-jia-2016-12-09
Reviewed rev. 11 (document currently at 15)
Review result Has Issues
Review completed: 2016-12-09

Review
review-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11-rtgdir-early-jia-2016-12-09

Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The Routing
Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as they pass through IETF
last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to
provide assistance to the Routing ADs. For more information about the Routing Directorate,
please see ​http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would be helpful if
you could consider them along with any other IETF Last Call comments that you receive, and
strive to resolve them through discussion or by updating the draft.

Document: draft-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11.txt
Reviewer: Jia He
Review Date: Dec.6, 2016
IETF LC End Date:
Intended Status: Standards Track

Summary:
This document is basically ready for publication, but has minor issues that should be
considered prior to publication.

Comments:
The draft is clearly structured and easy to read.

Major Issues:
No major issues found.

Minor Issues:
1) Section 3.1, the description of "Type field" of PTP Sub-TLV format (following Figure 3) is
the same as the description of "PTPType". Shouldn't the PTP Sub-TLV follow RTM sub-TLV
registry?

"The Type field identifies PTP sub-TLV defined in the Table 19 Values of messageType field in
[IEEE.1588.2008]."

"The PTPType indicates the type of PTP packet carried in the TLV. PTPType is the messageType
field of the PTPv2 packet whose values are defined in the Table 19 [IEEE.1588.2008]."

Another question about RTM sub-TLV registry, why only PTP 2-step is defined under RTM sub-TLV
registry(8.3)?


Nits:
1) Section 1, first paragragh, s/Generalized Associated Channel/Generic Associated Channel
2) Section 3, first paragragh, s/select/selected
3) Section 4.7, last paragraph of Page 12, s/If match have been found, then the calculated..../If match has been found, the calculated....
4) Section 5, the first paragragh, ".....as described in Section 4.6 or as described in the second paragraph of Section 4 and in Section 4.6, ...." Duplication? Not sure about what " the second paragraph of Section 4" really indicates
5) Section 7, Page 18(in the middle), BC needs to be spelt out, s/BC/Boundary Clock



B.R.
Jia

发件人: Zhangxian (Xian)
发送时间: 2016年11月22日 16:41
收件人: Hejia (Jia)
抄送: db3546@att.com; jonathan.hardwick@metaswitch.com; 'Jon Hudson'
主题: Routing directorate review of draft-ietf-mpls-residence-time

Hey, Jia,

Please would you do a routing directorate review of this draft?
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-mpls-residence-time-11


The draft has been submitted to the IESG for publication.  The responsible AD – Deborah – has requested a review from the directorate before she initiates the IETF last call.  It would be great if you could review the document and send comments by 6th December.

You can find some guidance and a review template at the following link:
​https://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDirGuidance

Please send your comments to the RTG Area Directors (​rtg-ads@ietf.org<mailto:rtg-ads@ietf.org>) and the draft authors, and copy the MPLS mailing list and the rtg-dir list.

Please let me know if you can do it, or not.

Many thanks,
Xian