Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
review-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07-genart-lc-enghardt-2019-10-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-11-05
Requested 2019-10-22
Authors Chandrasekar R, Tarek Saad, Ina Minei, Dante Pacella
Draft last updated 2019-10-30
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -05 by Julien Meuric (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -07 by Theresa Enghardt
Assignment Reviewer Theresa Enghardt
State Completed
Review review-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07-genart-lc-enghardt-2019-10-30
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/w4OEk-qCV5xFprZA0I_is8RHSTg
Reviewed rev. 07
Review result Ready with Nits
Review completed: 2019-10-30

Review
review-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07-genart-lc-enghardt-2019-10-30

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt
Review Date: 2019-10-30
IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-05
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. 

Major issues: None.

Minor issues: None.

Nits/editorial comments:

The abstract is hard to parse and could be improved by fixing the following nits.

OLD: "Facility backup method allows"
NEW: "The facility backup method allows"

OLD: "The many-to-one nature of local repair technique"
NEW: "The many-to-one nature of this local repair technique"

OLD: "This document enumerates facility backup procedures in RFC 4090"
NEW: "This document enumerates the facility backup procedures in RFC 4090" [or "several facility backup procedures", if not all procedures are enumerated here]

OLD: "and hence make facility backup method refresh-interval dependent."
NEW: "and hence make the facility backup method refresh-interval dependent."

OLD: "The RSVP-TE extensions defined in this document will enhance"
NEW: "This document defines RSVP-TE extensions to enhance"

Are "facility backup method", "facility backup procedure" and "facility backup protection mechanism" all the same thing? Please consider using only a single term to avoid confusion.

Please double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles in the rest of the document as well.