Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06
review-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06-genart-lc-housley-2018-11-30-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-12-11
Requested 2018-11-27
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Review State Completed
Reviewer Russ Housley
Review review-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06-genart-lc-housley-2018-11-30
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/IblLvdidVPXCSUbIpl7GFz1Uaog
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 09)
Review result Ready
Draft last updated 2018-11-30
Review completed: 2018-11-30

Review
review-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06-genart-lc-housley-2018-11-30

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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-rsvp-shared-labels-06
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2018-11-30
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-11 
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready


Major Concerns:

None


Minor Concerns:

Section 5.3: To understand this section, I had to learn about "loose
hops" from other sources.  Please consider adding this term to the ones
that are defined in Section 2.


Nits:

Throughout document: s/hop by hop/hop-by-hop/

Section 5.3.1: s/The net result is that by/As a result, by/