Last Call Review of draft-ietf-mpls-tp-use-cases-and-design-06
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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-tp-use-cases-and-design-06
Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <Miguel.A.Garcia at ericsson.com>
Review Date: 2013-02-10
IETF LC End Date: 2013-02-11
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Summary: The document is almost ready for publication as Informational 


RFC, but has some NITS that should be addressed.




Major issues: none

Minor issues: none

Nits/editorial comments:



- The RFC Editor rules require to expand each acronym at a first usage. I 


noticed that the draft uses Section 2 as a container of all the acronyms, 


but most of these acronyms have already been used in Section 1. So, I am 


not sure if the current text is acceptable to the RFC Editor. Perhaps the 


authors should send them a question. One potential idea to explore is 


leaving the first paragraph of Section 1 in there, and move the rest of 


the Section to a new Section 3, whose potential title is "Background". 


This will solve that problem.






- It appears that Section is alphabetically ordered, but the term "NMS" 


is misplaced.






- Section 3.3.2, first paragraph. The text refers to "PSW/SGW or ASNGW)". 


Section 2 expands "PSW" as Packet Data Network Gateway. I suspect the 


acronym is wrong, because the Packet Data Network Gateway is commonly 


abbreviated as PDN GW or P-GW. I have never seen PSW to refer to a PDN GW 


or P-GW.




/Miguel
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Miguel A. Garcia
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