IETF Last Call Review of draft-ietf-netmod-sub-intf-vlan-model-17
review-ietf-netmod-sub-intf-vlan-model-17-genart-lc-hares-2025-10-14-00

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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-sub-intf-vlan-model-??
Reviewer: Sue
Review Date: 2025-10-14
IETF LC End Date: 2025-10-23
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:

Major issues: none

Minor issues: Security section paragraph 3, the last sentence makes one wonder
if there are missing sensitivities/vulnerabilities.  If there are, please fill
this in so the operators have a warning. If this is an editorial NIT, please
just respond with completed text.

Nits/editorial comments:

1. Abstract - use of the ";" in the third sentence is confusing.  Consider
rewriting to remove ";".  The sentences do not follow grammatical rules for ";"
as parallel sentences.

2. use if "i.e." in sections 4, paragraph 3, sentence 3, should be considered
for rewriting.  The sentence becomes very confusing.

3. page 14, Yang text, case dotq-priority-tagged, leaft tag-type, description
needs to end with "." according to yang rules.

4. page 17, container dot1q-tag-rewrite, description, "E.g." would be better
replaced by "For example,"

5. page 18, container rewrite, case symetrical, container symmetrical,
description, "E.g." would be better replaced by "For example,"

6. page 25, Security Considerations section, paragraph 3, last sentence does
not list "subtress and data nodes with sensitivities". Last sentence is unclear
and uses incorrect English format.