Last Call Review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21
review-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21-genart-lc-dupont-2018-03-05-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 32)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-02-28
Requested 2018-02-14
Authors Joe Clarke , Mahesh Jethanandani , Clyde Wildes , Kiran Koushik
I-D last updated 2018-03-05
Completed reviews Yangdoctors Last Call review of -17 by Kent Watsen (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -21 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -21 by Yaron Sheffer (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -21 by Ron Bonica (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 21 (document currently at 32)
Result Ready
Completed 2018-03-05
review-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21-genart-lc-dupont-2018-03-05-00
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Document: draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20180225
IETF LC End Date: 20180228
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 
(I took my notes on version 21 but I have version 23 in front of me)

 - ToC page 2 and 6 page 27 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: acknowledgement -> acknowledgement

 - 4.1 page 10: do the same than 1.1 page 3: refer to RFC8174 too
  for keywords.

 - 4.1 page 18 (advanced-compare): spectify -> specify

 - 4.1 page 23 (remote transport and tls) (twice):
  specified: an ipv4 address, an ipv6 address, ipv4->IPv4 and ipv6->IPv6

 - 6 page 27: there is no "and" between the two last names and no
  final dot so I am afraid the list was truncated (BTW obviously iy is
  not the case but please add a final dot, i.e.:
  Aleksandr Zhdankin -> Aleksandr Zhdankin.

Note I trust the Yang tools to have checked the syntax.

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr