Last Call Review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-layout-types-03
review-ietf-nfsv4-layout-types-03-opsdir-lc-dodge-2015-05-15-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-nfsv4-layout-types
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2015-05-26
Requested 2015-03-28
Authors Thomas Haynes
I-D last updated 2015-05-15
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -03 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Joseph A. Salowey (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -03 by Menachem Dodge (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -09 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Menachem Dodge
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-nfsv4-layout-types by Ops Directorate Assigned
Reviewed revision 03 (document currently at 13)
Result Has nits
Completed 2015-05-15
review-ietf-nfsv4-layout-types-03-opsdir-lc-dodge-2015-05-15-00
Hello,

I have reviewed this document as part of the Operational directorate's ongoing
effort to review all IETF documents being processed by the IESG.  These
comments were written with the intent of improving the operational aspects of
the IETF drafts. Comments that are not addressed in last call may be included
in AD reviews during the IESG review.  Document editors and WG chairs should
treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

This document is for the Standards Track and if approved Updates RFC 5661. This
document is a clarification of RFC 5661 - "

Network File System (NFS) Version 4 Minor Version 1 Protocol"

NITS

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The tool has found the following:

 == Outdated reference: A later version (-05) exists of
     draft-ietf-nfsv4-flex-files-02

Additional NITS
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Abstract First Sentence: Repetition of the word "those".

This document provides help in distinguishing between the requirements for
Network File System (NFS) version 4.1's Parallel NFS (pNFS) and

those those

 specifically directed to the pNFS File Layout.

Section 2: Definitions - Not sure whether the word :striped" was intended here.

Data Server (DS): is one of the pNFS servers which provide the
 contents of a file system object which is a regular file.
 Depending on the layout, there might be one or more data servers
 over which the data is

striped

.

Section 2: Definitions - Suggest "lay out" rather than "lays out".

Layout Type: describes both the storage protocol used to access the
 data and the aggregation scheme used to

lays

out the file data on
 the underlying storage devices.

Section 3.3:

Editorial Requirements - Suggest "separately" rather than "separably"

"While these could be envisioned as one section in that the fencing
 issue might be the only security issue, it is recommended to deal
 with them

separably

."

Other than the above nits I have no further issues with this document.

Thank you kindly.

Best Regards,

Menachem Dodge