Last Call Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf-09
review-ietf-opsawg-ntf-09-genart-lc-mishra-2021-10-23-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2021-10-27
Requested 2021-10-13
Authors Haoyu Song , Fengwei Qin , Pedro Martinez-Julia , Laurent Ciavaglia , Aijun Wang
I-D last updated 2021-10-23
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -09 by Gyan Mishra (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -09 by Alexey Melnikov (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Sheng Jiang (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -09 by Michael Scharf (diff)
Intdir Telechat review of -10 by Jean-Michel Combes (diff)
Rtgdir Telechat review of -10 by Dhruv Dhody (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Gyan Mishra
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/ItkS25VOVfDg8eLogFDMCtpeoFM
Reviewed revision 09 (document currently at 13)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2021-10-23
review-ietf-opsawg-ntf-09-genart-lc-mishra-2021-10-23-00
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Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-ntf-??
Reviewer: Gyan Mishra
Review Date: 2021-10-23
IETF LC End Date: 2021-10-27
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:
This draft analyzes the overall framework of network telemetry technologies
that exist today and future evolution of telemetry technology and data
gathering from a control plane, data plane and management plane perspective. 
Document is well written.

Major issues:
None

Minor issues:
None
Nits/editorial comments:

Section 4.1.3 Forwarding plane telemetry does not include STAMP RFC 8762.  
Mention traditional non OAM based ping ICMP Echo snd Echo-Reply.

 Also for OAM based maybe list the variety of OAM based ping such as for all
 data planes such as MPLS, RSVP-TE,  L2 VPN pdeudowire OAM ping VCCV (Virtual
 Circuit Connection Verification) RFC 5085 RFC 7189, RFC 5586 GACH PW OAM.

Any of the RFCs listed here maybe include as informative references.

Also NVO3 VXLAN and BIER OAM.  SFC service plane RFC 8924 SFC OAM.

Also DETNET forwarding and service sub planes DETNET OAM.

SDN and SD-WAN, PCEP, BGP all centralized controller based architecture can
also be used for network telemetry.

RESTCONF REST API is missing should be mentioned