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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-pcaplinktype-05
review-ietf-opsawg-pcaplinktype-05-intdir-lc-bernardos-2024-08-22-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-opsawg-pcaplinktype
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type Last Call Review
Team Internet Area Directorate (intdir)
Deadline 2024-08-26
Requested 2024-08-12
Requested by Joe Clarke
Authors Guy Harris , Michael Richardson
I-D last updated 2024-08-22
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -04 by Joel M. Halpern (diff)
Intdir Last Call review of -05 by Carlos J. Bernardos (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Carlos J. Bernardos
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-opsawg-pcaplinktype by Internet Area Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/int-dir/Y_V1GCEOIusCsXwzOHKXyIKf_1w
Reviewed revision 05 (document currently at 08)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-08-22
review-ietf-opsawg-pcaplinktype-05-intdir-lc-bernardos-2024-08-22-00
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I think the document is almost ready. I’ve just found a few nits.

The following are minor issues (typos, misspelling, minor text improvements)
with the document:

- “Wireshark” and “wireshark” is used in the document. Please choose one
capitalization and be consistent throughout the document.

- “ Reference: Indicates an authoritative the document reference for the
LinkType or a requester reference.” —> this sentence does not parse well. I
guess the “the” between “authoritative” and “document” should be removed.

- “DLT” should be expanded.

- “ maintain URLs over a long period of time, and a documented in a
"wp-uploaded" section is highly likely to disappear.” —> does not parse well. I
guess “a” in “a document” should be removed.

- “ In addition Specifications that require a reader to click ” —> I think a
comma is missing after “addition”.

- “(This is the opinion of other corporate lawyers, who worry about what their
employees might have agreed to)” —> is this really needed?

- “Linktypes may be allocated for specifications not publically available may
be made within the First-Come/First-Served area. This includes specifications
that might be classified. The minimal requirement is for a contact person for
that link type.” —> I think this needs to be rewritten.

- “Linktypes” and LINKTYPE” are used sometimes with the same meaning (I guess).