Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis-05
review-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis-05-genart-lc-droms-2016-09-28-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-09-21
Requested 2016-08-23
Authors Luca Martini , Giles Heron
I-D last updated 2016-09-28
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -05 by Ralph Droms
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Adrian Farrel (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Ralph Droms
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 05
Result Ready
Completed 2016-09-28
review-ietf-pals-rfc4447bis-05-genart-lc-droms-2016-09-28-00
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This draft is ready for publication as a Standards Track RFC.

I have only two small editorial comments:

Figure 2 appears to be missing a couple of backslashes in the ASCII art drawing.

The sentence "This document has been written to address errata in a previous
version of this standard.” probably ought to be moved to section 2.  A broader
statement in the Abstract to the effect that this document is a rewrite of RFC
4447 for publication as an Internet Standard might be more helpful.

- Ralph