Telechat Review of draft-ietf-pce-pcep-mib-10
review-ietf-pce-pcep-mib-10-genart-telechat-yee-2014-10-28-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-pce-pcep-mib |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 11) | |
| Type | Telechat Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2014-10-28 | |
| Requested | 2014-10-16 | |
| Authors | Kiran Agrahara Sreenivasa , Stephan Emile , Quintin Zhao , Daniel King , Jonathan Hardwick | |
| I-D last updated | 2014-10-28 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -10
by Peter E. Yee
(diff)
Genart Telechat review of -10 by Peter E. Yee (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Carl Wallace (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Peter E. Yee |
| State | Completed | |
| Request | Telechat review on draft-ietf-pce-pcep-mib by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
| Reviewed revision | 10 (document currently at 11) | |
| Result | Ready w/nits | |
| Completed | 2014-10-28 |
review-ietf-pce-pcep-mib-10-genart-telechat-yee-2014-10-28-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-pce-pcep-mib-11 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: October-27-2014 IETF LC End Date: October-13-2014 IESG Telechat date: October-30-2014 Summary: This draft is ready with nits for publication as a Standards Track RFC. [Ready with nits] This draft presents an SNMP MIB for use with the Path Computation Element communications Protocol. It's cleanly written and fairly consistent, so that it's relatively easy to understand the myriad objects and their definitions. Somehow I failed to hit the LC review for this draft, but given its polished state, I think it's already in a fine state. Nits: General: Choose between "canceled" and "cancelled" (both of which appear in the document) and use consistently. Specific: Page 3, Section 1.2, last paragraph: append a comma after "remote PCEP speaker". Page 4, 1st paragraph, 4th sentence: replace "to" with "with". Also delete the second occurrence of "STD 58". Page 6, Section 3.5, 1st paragraph after bullet items, 1st sentence: replace "which" with "that". Page 8, comment with "RFC Ed,:" in it: change the comma to a period. Page 12, 1st line: change "backoff" to "back-off" for consistency of use with the rest of the document. After so many sent/received pairs in the document, I was disappointed not to see a pcePcepSessNumCorruptSent. ;-)