Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-
review-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-genart-lc-dupont-2012-01-15-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 08) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2012-01-13 | |
Requested | 2011-12-30 | |
Authors | Georgios Karagiannis , Tom Taylor , Kwok Ho Chan , Michael Menth , Philip Eardley | |
I-D last updated | 2012-01-15 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -??
by Francis Dupont
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Assignment | Reviewer | Francis Dupont |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Completed | 2012-01-15 |
review-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-genart-lc-dupont-2012-01-15-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120106 IETF LC End Date: 20120113 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - in the whole document: behaviour -> behavior and signalling -> signaling (note the spelling of collocated is dubious too) - Abstract page 1: in the latter case -> in the first case - Abstract page 1: the usage is to not refer to RFC in the Abstract - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 3: measures- -> measures (in general the document is at the limit of abuse of '-' character, here it is clearly a typo) - 6 page 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 6 page 6: I don't like the term 'generated', IMHO you can easily find a better/nicer term. - 7.2 page 7: C. Le Faucher, -> C., Le Faucheur, ^ ^ Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr