Early Review of draft-ietf-pim-3228bis-05
review-ietf-pim-3228bis-05-genart-early-davies-2024-06-06-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pim-3228bis-05
Requested revision 05 (document currently at 07)
Type Early Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2024-06-05
Requested 2024-05-21
Requested by Gunter Van de Velde
Authors Brian Haberman
I-D last updated 2024-06-06
Completed reviews Rtgdir Early review of -05 by Andy Smith (diff)
Genart Early review of -05 by Elwyn B. Davies (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Susan Hares (diff)
Artart Last Call review of -05 by Martin J. Dürst (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -05 by Ned Smith (diff)
Intdir Telechat review of -06 by Dave Thaler (diff)
Artart Telechat review of -06 by Martin J. Dürst (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Elwyn B. Davies
State Completed
Request Early review on draft-ietf-pim-3228bis by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/EaFmOGpB1san5MrVNdFuBNdXJfE
Reviewed revision 05 (document currently at 07)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-06-06
review-ietf-pim-3228bis-05-genart-early-davies-2024-06-06-00
Gen-Art Early review of draft-ietf-pim-3228bis-05

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this early review of this draft.
The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being
processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.

Summary:  This is a simple update of the IANA allocation processes for a small
number of fields in the IGMP and MLD protocols previously mostly covered by RFC
3228 and provides unification of processes for the IPv4 and IPv6 versions of
the protocols dealing with multicast listener discovery.  The document is ready
for last call except for a couple of minor nits.

Major Issues:
None

Minor Issues:
s6.1:  Given that this document will obsolete RFC 3228 and incorporates the
whole function of RFC 3228, I do not think the RFC 3228 should be normative and
should be relegated to Informative.

Nits and Editorial Comments:
Abstract and s1:
I suggest:
OLD:
This document obsoletes [RFC3228].
NEW:
This document obsoletes [RFC3228] and unifies guidelines for IPv4 and IPv6
protocols. ENDS

s2.3: The comment from s2.2:
   The initial contents of this requested registry should contain the
   E-bit defined in [RFC9279].
should be duplicated in s2.3.