Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pim-light-08
review-ietf-pim-light-08-tsvart-lc-tuexen-2024-10-18-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-pim-light |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 10) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | Transport Area Review Team (tsvart) | |
Deadline | 2024-10-18 | |
Requested | 2024-10-04 | |
Authors | Hooman Bidgoli , Stig Venaas , Mankamana Prasad Mishra , Zhaohui (Jeffrey) Zhang , Mike McBride | |
I-D last updated | 2024-10-18 | |
Completed reviews |
Rtgdir Last Call review of -06
by Henning Rogge
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Genart Last Call review of -08 by Mallory Knodel (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Chris M. Lonvick (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -08 by Susan Hares (diff) Tsvart Last Call review of -08 by Michael Tüxen (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Michael Tüxen |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-pim-light by Transport Area Review Team Assigned | |
Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/DUtkWdhhvtq3aT23J1D-IfuuOcs | |
Reviewed revision | 08 (document currently at 10) | |
Result | Ready w/nits | |
Completed | 2024-10-18 |
review-ietf-pim-light-08-tsvart-lc-tuexen-2024-10-18-00
This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the IETF discussion list for information. When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review. Nits: Section 2: It looks strange to have text followed by a subsection containing a single sentence. Section 2.1: Missing . at the end. Section 3: OLD: In section 4.5 it describes that If a router NEW: In section 4.5 it describes that if a router Section 3.2 Missing . at the end of first sentence. Section 3.5 Missing . at the end of the second paragraph. References All are strangely formatted. Only the title should be enclosed in ", there should be a link to the RFC, ... References OLD: ambiguity of NEW: Ambiguity of OLD: Tuxen NEW Tüxen