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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pim-light-08
review-ietf-pim-light-08-tsvart-lc-tuexen-2024-10-18-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-pim-light
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team Transport Area Review Team (tsvart)
Deadline 2024-10-18
Requested 2024-10-04
Authors Hooman Bidgoli , Stig Venaas , Mankamana Prasad Mishra , Zhaohui (Jeffrey) Zhang , Mike McBride
I-D last updated 2024-10-18
Completed reviews Rtgdir Last Call review of -06 by Henning Rogge (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -08 by Mallory Knodel (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -08 by Chris M. Lonvick (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -08 by Susan Hares (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -08 by Michael Tüxen (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Michael Tüxen
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-pim-light by Transport Area Review Team Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/DUtkWdhhvtq3aT23J1D-IfuuOcs
Reviewed revision 08 (document currently at 10)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2024-10-18
review-ietf-pim-light-08-tsvart-lc-tuexen-2024-10-18-00
This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's
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primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's
authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the IETF
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Nits:

Section 2:
It looks strange to have text followed by a subsection containing a single
sentence.

Section 2.1:
Missing . at the end.

Section 3:
OLD:
In section 4.5 it describes that If a router
NEW:
In section 4.5 it describes that if a router

Section 3.2
Missing . at the end of first sentence.

Section 3.5
Missing . at the end of the second paragraph.

References
All are strangely formatted. Only the title should be enclosed in ",
there should be a link to the RFC, ...

References
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ambiguity of
NEW:
Ambiguity of
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Tuxen
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