Last Call Review of draft-ietf-pwe3-vccv-impl-survey-results-02
review-ietf-pwe3-vccv-impl-survey-results-02-genart-lc-carpenter-2013-09-09-00

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Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-vccv-impl-survey-results-02.txt (Informational)
Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
Review Date: 2013-09-09
IETF LC End Date: 2013-09-23
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Summary:  Almost ready
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Minor Issues:
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I found the Abstract too complicated and detailed, and the first paragraph of
the Introduction too simple and general. Personally, I'd be inclined to
swap them, with minor adjustments.

>  Note that the intention of this document is to not draw conclusions
>  based upon these results, but rather to simply report the results to
>  the PWE3 working group for its use when developing other drafts.

OK, but wouldn't it be reasonable to include a short "summary of results"
section? You leave the reader to swallow a whole lot of detailed answers
rather than providing an overview.

>  The responding companies are listed below
>  in Section 2.1.
...
> No provisions were made for anonymity.

Were they told in advance that their names would be published? I think this needs to
be made clear. (Compare RFC6036, where we had a number of respondents that we validated,
but who requested to remain anonymous in the published results.)

I think the second paragraph of Security Considerations would fit better
in section 1.1. "PW/VCCV Survey Overview" where you describe the methodology.

Editorial:
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The last sentence of the Abstract is ungrammatical and also conveys no new information.
It could be deleted.