Last Call Review of draft-ietf-radext-coa-proxy-05
review-ietf-radext-coa-proxy-05-genart-lc-evens-2018-08-13-00

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Document: draft-ietf-radext-coa-proxy-??
Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review Date: 2018-08-13
IETF LC End Date: 2018-08-13
IESG Telechat date: 2018-08-16

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has 
nits that should be fixed before publication.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments: 
Abstract contains "Section 3.1" which becomes an HTML reference
link. This incorrectly links to the current draft section 3.1,
not the intended RFC5176 Section 3.1.  This is repeated in 
the introduction.  

IMO, that last sentence would read better with "corrects the omission"
instead of "that."

Code points are not summarized in IANA Considerations section. 

The references are not formatted per RFC7322.

The HTML rendering of Section 2.2 CoA Processing does not render
the RFC5176 link correctly.  Bracketed references normally are followed
by some text.

IMO, considering this draft updates 5176, I feel it would be better for the
problem statement to be clearer on updates and clarifications. 

In section 3.3, while humorous, I suggest dropping "on the planet." 

Section 6 Security Considerations link for Section 11 of RFC6929 is 
missing keyword "of." This results in two links instead of the correct
link.