Last Call Review of draft-ietf-radext-radius-fragmentation-09
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Document: draft-ietf-radext-radius-fragmentation-09

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2014-12-25

IETF LC End Date:  2014-12-25

IESG Telechat date: NA



Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC but I have some
comments.



Minor issues:

-Not sure about this, [page 1] says Updates: 2865, 6158, 6929 (if approved).
Can an experimental RFC update non-experimental RFCs?

I read the note in Section 12.1. Just raising the question.



Nits/editorial comments:

-[Page 4], Intro, it would be good to remind the reader on why the 4096 octet
limit was put in place initially and what has changed since.



-[Page 4], Section 1, "limitation mean that"--->"limitation means that"



-[Page 4], "this approach does entirely solve"---> should it be "does not" ?



-[Page 5], "the set up"--->"the setup"



-[Page 5], "to implement the draft"--->"to implement the RFC"



-[Page 6], "NOT be used to exchange more than 100K of data", not clear what
100K is here? bytes? why?



-[Page 7], "more than 4K of data", as above, not clear what 4K is?



-[Page 9], "the RADIUS and COA"-->"CoA" instead of "COA"



-[Page 14],"other then Additional-Authorization."--->"other than ..."



-[Page 14],"

Compliant

 RADIUS Chlient"-->"...client"



-[Page 14],"if tey had"--->"if they had"



-[Page 27], "into a even"--->"into an even"





-Other:

* Not sure if this RFC should reference to draft-ietf-radext-bigger-packets as
another alternative to look for?

* Please spell at first use: EAP, NAS, PKI, SAML,ABFAB

*chunk/chunking, would it be better to use fragment/fragmenting/fragmentation
instead ? or mention the two terms are used interchangeably.







Best Regards,

Meral

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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson

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