Last Call Review of draft-ietf-regext-org-11
review-ietf-regext-org-11-opsdir-lc-schoenwaelder-2018-10-19-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-regext-org
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2018-10-08
Requested 2018-09-24
Authors Linlin Zhou , Ning Kong , Guiqing Zhou , Jiankang Yao , James Gould
I-D last updated 2018-10-19
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Charlie Kaufman (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -10 by Stewart Bryant (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -11 by Jürgen Schönwälder (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -11 by Stewart Bryant (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Jürgen Schönwälder
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-regext-org by Ops Directorate Assigned
Reviewed revision 11 (document currently at 12)
Result Has nits
Completed 2018-10-19
review-ietf-regext-org-11-opsdir-lc-schoenwaelder-2018-10-19-00
Thanks for a concise and well written document. I have not run tools
to validate the XSD and the XML artefacts but the definitions all look
reasonable.

Comment:

- What does the following mean in the definition of e164StringType?

        <attribute name="x" type="token" />

  It is indeed the intention to use "x"? What is the reason for having
  e164Type, why not use e164StringType?

Nits:

- What are "Organization transform commands"? This phrase appears
  several times in 3.4 an it seems this refers to what section 4.2
  describes later on. Well, if you read the document sequentially,
  things are a bit confusing. Perhaps define upfront what transform
  commands are? It might also be that EPP people are used to
  "transform commands" and this just shows my lack of familiarity with
  EPP.

- s/ement/element/

- s/Zero of more <org:status> element/Zero of more <org:status> elements/