Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06
review-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06-genart-lc-miller-2017-09-11-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-08-28
Requested 2017-08-14
Other Reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -06 by Zitao Wang (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -06 by Chris Lonvick (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Matthew Miller
Review review-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06-genart-lc-miller-2017-09-11
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/ST_t9CPxPvFbsefpgdsmemXD1k8
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 07)
Review result Ready with Nits
Draft last updated 2017-09-11
Review closed: 2017-09-11

Review
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Document: draft-ietf-rmcat-coupled-cc-06
Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
Review Date:  2017-09-11
IETF LC End Date: 2017-08-28
IESG Telechat date: 2017-09-14

Summary:

This document is ready to be published as Experimental; I have some nits
below that addressing them would help with the readability.

Major issues:  NONE

Minor issues:  NONE

Nits/editorial comments:

* In Section 2. "Definitions", the second sentence detailing the term
"Flow" is awkward.  I think "or" can be added between "connection," and
"an RTP stream" to correct it?

  """
  It could, for example, be a transport layer connection, or an RTP
  stream [RFC7656], whether or not this RTP stream is multiplexed
  onto an RTP session with other RTP streams.
  """

* In Section 4. "Architectural overview", the last paragraph has an
awkwardly-phrased sentence.  I suggest the following sentence be changed from:
  """
  It does, for instance, not define how many bits must be used to represent
  FSIs, or in which way the entities communicate.
  """

  to the following:
  """
  It does not, for instance, define how many bits must be used to represent
  FSIs, or in which way the entities communicate.
  """