Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rmt-flute-revised-
|Requested rev.||no specific revision (document currently at 16)|
|Type||Last Call Review|
|Team||General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)|
Genart Last Call review of - by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of - by Dave Cridland (diff)
|Draft last updated||2012-02-27|
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-rmt-flute-revised-13.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20120229 IETF LC End Date: 20120224 IESG Telechat date: 20120301 Summary: Almost Ready Important note: due to last comments from the Last Call it seems there will be a -14 version... Major issues: None Minor issues: not a real one (it was inherited from RFC 5775) but in the security considerations there is nothing about IPsec/AH (BTW people who didn't implement it didn't implement the transport mode (for IPsec/ESP) too :-). Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 3 and 9 page 36: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 6: please add a reference to RFC2357 (or make it an explicit reference) - 1.1.3 page 7: I suggest to add the "diode" in the environment where FLUTE can be used (diodes are more common than you can believe :-) - 3 page 9 (and other places): e.g. -> , e.g., and i.e. -> , i.e., - 3.1 page 9: I'd like to get the type (e.g., integer) of fields, for instance I have no idea of what a TSI really looks like. - 6 page 27: session ; -> session; and at the next line session. -> session; (only the last item gets a dot) - 7.2.2 page 30: this is the place I am surprised to not get IPsec/AH [RFC4302] as an alternative to IPsec/ESP [RFC4303] when integrity and sender authentication is wanted. - 10 page 36: 52134 Herzogenrath, Germany -> 52134 Herzogenrath Germany - Authors' Addresses page 45: US -> USA (note: the Innovallee; is dubious too) Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr PS: I expect to get the new version so to have more time to read (more) carefully the body of the document (i.e., 3 - 6).