Last Call Review of draft-ietf-roll-terminology-13
review-ietf-roll-terminology-13-genart-lc-dupont-2013-10-21-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-roll-terminology
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 13)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-10-17
Requested 2013-10-03
Draft last updated 2013-10-21
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -12 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -13 by Francis Dupont
Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Alan DeKok (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Review review-ietf-roll-terminology-13-genart-lc-dupont-2013-10-21
Reviewed rev. 13
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2013-10-21

Review
review-ietf-roll-terminology-13-genart-lc-dupont-2013-10-21

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

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http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-roll-terminology-13.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20131014
IETF LC End Date: 20131027
IESG Telechat date: 20131024

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: (BTW only editorial comments)
 - Title page 1: Ruting -> Routing

 - Abstract page 1: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - ToC page 2 and 5 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 2 page 3: commisioning -> commissioning

 - 2 page 4 Data Sink: move the LBR into from Field Device to here

 - 2 page 4 and many pages 5 and 6: e.g. -> e.g., and i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 2 page 4: I suggest to use real units, i.e., KiB (aka kibibyte)
  and kbits/s (K not followed by i stands for Kelvin :-)

 - 2 page 5 P2MP: RFC4461]and [RFC4875] -> RFC4461] and [RFC4875]

 - 2 page 6: arbitratry -> arbitrary

Regards 

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr