Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13
review-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13-genart-lc-dupont-2014-01-13-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 16) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2013-12-09 | |
Requested | 2013-11-25 | |
Authors | Curtis Villamizar , Dave McDysan , Ning So , Andrew G. Malis , Lucy Yong | |
I-D last updated | 2014-01-13 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -10
by Francis Dupont
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Genart Last Call review of -13 by Francis Dupont (diff) Genart Telechat review of -15 by Francis Dupont (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Taylor Yu (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -13 by Taylor Yu (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -13 by Tina Tsou (Ting ZOU) (diff) |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Francis Dupont |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 13 (document currently at 16) | |
Result | Ready | |
Completed | 2014-01-13 |
review-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13-genart-lc-dupont-2014-01-13-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-10.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20130617 IETF LC End Date: 20130619 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - ToC page 3 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 2 page 4: double include words in: The services supported include pseudowire based services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services, I suggest something like: The supported services are, but not limited to, pseudowire based services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services, - 3 page 5 (component link): the term NPO is used before being defined - 3 page 5 (component link): expand the WDM abbrev -- not well known according tothe RFC Editor list: http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt - 3 page 5 (flow identification): same for the PW abbrev - 4.1 page 6: CAN -> MAY - 6 page 12 (MR#10) -> interpretted -> interpreted - 9 page 13: Encrption -> Encryption - Authors' Addresses: add the country (USA) in postal addresses Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr