Last Call Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13
review-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13-genart-lc-dupont-2014-01-13-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 16)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-12-09
Requested 2013-11-25
Other Reviews Genart Last Call review of -10 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -15 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Taylor Yu (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -13 by Taylor Yu (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -13 by Tina Tsou (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Francis Dupont
Review review-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13-genart-lc-dupont-2014-01-13
Posted at http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/gen-art/current/msg08741.html
Reviewed rev. 13 (document currently at 16)
Review result Ready
Draft last updated 2014-01-13
Review completed: 2014-01-13

Review
review-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-13-genart-lc-dupont-2014-01-13

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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-rtgwg-cl-requirement-10.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20130617
IETF LC End Date: 20130619
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 3 and 7 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 2 page 4: double include words in:

   The services supported include pseudowire based services (RFC 3985
   [RFC3985]), including VPN services,

 I suggest something like:

   The supported services are, but not limited to, pseudowire based
   services (RFC 3985 [RFC3985]), including VPN services,

 - 3 page 5 (component link): the term NPO is used before being defined

 - 3 page 5 (component link): expand the WDM abbrev -- not well known
  according tothe RFC Editor list:
  

http://www.rfc-editor.org/rfc-style-guide/abbrev.expansion.txt



 - 3 page 5 (flow identification): same for the PW abbrev

 - 4.1 page 6: CAN -> MAY

 - 6 page 12 (MR#10) -> interpretted -> interpreted

 - 9 page 13: Encrption -> Encryption

 - Authors' Addresses: add the country (USA) in postal addresses

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr