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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push-21

Request Review of draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 29)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-12-21
Requested 2018-12-07
Authors Christer Holmberg , Michael Arnold
I-D last updated 2018-12-19
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -21 by Scott G. Kelly (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -21 by Stewart Bryant (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Stewart Bryant
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 21 (document currently at 29)
Result Ready w/nits
Completed 2018-12-19
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Document: draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push-21
Reviewer: Stewart Bryant
Review Date: 2018-12-19
IETF LC End Date: 2018-12-21
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: A well written document with some minor points that could use a little

Major issues: None

Minor issues:

In Figure 1 the following is included:

     Via: SIP/2.0/TCP;branch=z9hG4bKnashds7
     Max-Forwards: 70
     To: Alice <>
     From: Alice <>;tag=456248
     Call-ID: 843817637684230@998sdasdh09
     CSeq: 1826 REGISTER
     Contact: <;
     Expires: 7200
     Content-Length: 0

SB> However I don't at this stage of the text see the relationship between the
packet flow digram and the text that follows.

   Contact: IESG (

SB> Is the whole IESG the most appropriate first point of contact?


Nits/editorial comments:
Presumably the references to RFC XXXX will be replaced by RFC <this RFC> but
that does not seem to be noted in the text


   As dicussed in [RFC4320] and [RFC4321], non-INVITE transactions must
SB> Typo s/dicussed/discussed/


   Example: pn-prid = 00fc13adff78512

   For more information about the APNs Topic and device token:

SB> Is the following part of the example? If so it could usefully be delimited
as SB>  such, otherwise, I don't understand why it is not a normal document
 SB> reference.

SB> Similarly in the following section