Last Call Review of draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment-
review-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment-secdir-lc-gondrom-2012-10-18-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 08)
Type IETF Last Call Review
Team Security Area Directorate (secdir)
Deadline 2012-10-23
Requested 2012-10-04
Authors Yiu Lee , Roberta Maglione , Carl Williams , Christian Jacquenet , Mohamed Boucadair
I-D last updated 2024-11-22 (Latest revision 2013-01-17)
Completed reviews Genart IETF Last Call review of -06 by David L. Black (diff)
Secdir IETF Last Call review of -?? by Tobias Gondrom
Assignment Reviewer Tobias Gondrom
State Completed
Request IETF Last Call review on draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment by Security Area Directorate Assigned
Result Has nits
Completed 2012-10-18
review-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment-secdir-lc-gondrom-2012-10-18-00


I have reviewed this document as part of the
      security directorate's ongoing effort to review all IETF documents
      being processed by the IESG.  These comments were written
      primarily for the benefit of the security area directors. 
      Document editors and WG chairs should treat these comments just
      like any other last call comments.








        I believe this document (

draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-deployment)
        

 has an adequate security considerations section and the
        main security risks are sufficiently described for an
        informational "deployment considerations" RFC.





      COMMENTS: 


      section 2.6: 


      "Internet hosts such as servers must no longer rely solely on IP
      address to identify an abused user." 


      Don't you mean here: "... an abusive user."


      and again in the next sentence "...to identify an abused user..."
      should be "...to identify an abusive user".





      Nits: 


      - section 1: Overview


      third sentence: first mention of "softwire" may require a
      reference





      - section 2.5, last paragraph:


      s/Depedning on the rate of NAT table changes/Depending on the rate
      of NAT table changes





      Best regards, Tobias