Last Call Review of draft-ietf-stir-passport-divert-07
review-ietf-stir-passport-divert-07-genart-lc-resnick-2020-01-09-00

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Document: draft-ietf-stir-passport-divert-07
Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review Date: 2020-01-09
IETF LC End Date: 2019-12-02
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: Ready with Nits

While I found the document (and particularly section 4) very technically dense,
I think the detail will help implementers tremendously. Nothing other than a
few editorial issues.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 3, paragraph 1:

                                                               Note that
   a new PASSporT is only necessary when the canonical form of the
   "dest" identifier (per the canonicalization procedures in [RFC8224]
   Section 8) changes due to this retargeting.  If the canonical form of
   the "dest" identifiier is not changed during retargeting, then a new
   PASSporT with a "div" claim MUST NOT be produced.

Seems to me that these two sentences should be in their own paragraph. It took
me a second to figure out that the following sentence was not related to these.

Section 4:

   ...Other using protocols of PASSporT

Don't you mean "Other protocols using PASSporT"?

Section 4.2, paragraph 2:

I think you mean "necessarily", not "necessary"