Telechat Review of draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03
review-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03-genart-telechat-dupont-2013-08-28-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 04)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-08-27
Requested 2013-08-22
Authors David L. Black , Paul Koning
I-D last updated 2013-08-28
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -03 by Francis Dupont (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -03 by Taylor Yu (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Francis Dupont
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 03 (document currently at 04)
Result Ready
Completed 2013-08-28
review-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03-genart-telechat-dupont-2013-08-28-00
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Document: draft-ietf-storm-ipsec-ips-update-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2013-08-14
IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-19
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues:
 - this is in fact a pure editorial concern but as it can have a big impact
  on not IETF expert readers I put it here:
  At the end of 3 page 9:
   use of IPsec v3 is recommended -> use of IPsec v3 is RECOMMENDED
 Two notes for the discussion:
  - a RFC 2119 keyword doesn't need to be capitalized
  - it is the only place with a preference for IPsec v3 over v2.

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Authors' Addresses page 16 (twice): US -> USA

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr