Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno-10
review-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno-10-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-11-03-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 17)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2017-10-19
Requested 2017-10-05
Other Reviews Rtgdir Telechat review of -12 by Papadimitriou Dimitri (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -10 by Watson Ladd (diff)
Secdir Telechat review of -12 by Watson Ladd (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
Review review-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno-10-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-11-03
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/bB9OTyRVUoWUjKLj-CWRO3B-55E
Reviewed rev. 10 (document currently at 17)
Review result Ready with Issues
Draft last updated 2017-11-03
Review closed: 2017-11-03

Review
review-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno-10-genart-lc-shirazipour-2017-11-03

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Document: draft-ietf-tcpinc-tcpeno-10
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2017-10-16
IETF LC End Date:   2017-10-19
IESG Telechat date: 2017-10-26


Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC but I have some comments.

Major issues:

Minor issues:
The discussions around misbehaving middleboxes was good but more examples would have been better:
Would it make sense to add some examples of well-behaved TCP-proxy middleboxes (TCP terminating proxies)? What is allowed for example? E.g. can the TEP on each side of the proxy be different?
Security section could also be enhanced in that regard.

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 7] , "TEP identifer"---->"TEP identifier"
[Page 16] , "Futhermore,"-----"Furthermore,"
[Page 19], "unlikely to to"---->"unlikely to"
General, some acronyms not spelled at first use


Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com