Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2012-04-04
IETF LC End Date: 2012-04-11
Summary: Essentially ready for publication. I've got a few editorial comments and nits that might should be considered prior to publication.
-- IDNits reports some issues--please check.
-- The headers say the draft obsoletes 3517, but this is not mentioned in the abstract. The introduction says this is a revision of 3517, which is a bit ambiguous as to whether "revise" means to "obsolete" or "update".
-- Abstract: Any reason not to put the abstract on the first page as is currently conventional?
-- section 1, 2nd paragraph, [RFC793]
Consider moving the reference to the first TCP mention.
-- section 1, 2nd paragraph, 2nd to last sentence: "Alternate SACK-based loss recovery methods can be used in TCP as implementers see fit (as long as the alternate algorithms follow the guidelines provided in [RFC5681])."
This seems redundant with the first sentence in the paragraph.
-- section 2, definition of "Pipe": 'The algorithm is often referred to as the "pipe algorithm"'
Which algorithm? The one in this document? The "fundamentally different one"?
-- section 4:
Please expand SMSS on first mention.