Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-
review-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-genart-lc-campbell-2012-05-14-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-3517bis
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 02)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2012-04-10
Requested 2012-03-29
Draft last updated 2012-05-14
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -?? by Ben Campbell
Assignment Reviewer Ben Campbell
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-genart-lc-campbell-2012-05-14
Review completed: 2012-05-14

Review
review-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-genart-lc-campbell-2012-05-14

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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-3517bis-02
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2012-04-04
IETF LC End Date: 2012-04-11

Summary: Essentially ready for publication. I've got a few editorial comments and nits that might should be considered prior to publication.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

None

Nits/editorial comments:

-- IDNits reports some issues--please check.

-- The headers say the draft obsoletes 3517, but this is not mentioned in the abstract. The introduction says this is a revision of 3517, which is a bit ambiguous as to whether "revise" means to "obsolete" or "update".

-- Abstract: Any reason not to put the abstract on the first page as is currently conventional?

-- section 1, 2nd paragraph, [RFC793]

Consider moving the reference to the first TCP mention.

-- section 1, 2nd paragraph, 2nd to last sentence: "Alternate SACK-based loss recovery methods can be used in TCP as implementers see fit (as long as the alternate algorithms follow the guidelines provided in [RFC5681])."

This seems redundant with the first sentence in the paragraph.

-- section 2, definition of "Pipe": 'The algorithm is often referred to as the "pipe algorithm"'

Which algorithm? The one in this document? The "fundamentally different one"?

-- section 4:

Please expand SMSS on first mention.