Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09
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Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-fastopen-09

Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour

Review Date: 2014-07-23

IETF LC End Date:   2014-07-23

IESG Telechat date: NA





Summary:

This draft is ready to be published as Experimental RFC, but I have some
comments.



Nits/editorial comments:

-Abstract says "thus saving up to one full round trip time (RTT)": by just
reading the abstract one would think 1.5 RTT since initial 3WHS is avoided.

Reading the rest of the draft clarifies this though. Suggestion :



"

TFO allows data to be carried in the SYN and SYN-ACK packets

   and consumed by the receiving end during 'an' initial connection

   handshake, 'and' saves up to one full round trip time (RTT) compared

   to the standard TCP, ......

"



-[page 4] "MSL", to spell out at first use "maximum segment lifetime" (or
please consider mentioning reference to key TCP RFCs in Terminology section).



-General: Also few other acronyms used without spelling out at first use,
please consider those as well.



-[Page 7], 'Fast Open Cookie Option', it would be more familiar to IETF
community to call "Kind" field "Type", unless there was a reason for this
differentiation.

-[Page 10] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.



-[Page 12], typo "connection-sharding"--->"connection-sharing"



-[page 14] "as a application"--->"as an application"



-[Page 17], typo "Neverthless"--->"Nevertheless"



-[Page 18], typo "meet the the"---->"meet the"



-[Page 21], typo "in Section Section 4.1.1"---->"in Section 4.1.1"



-[Page 21] please remove extra space (page break) if not needed.



Best Regards,

Meral





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Meral Shirazipour

Ericsson

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