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Last Call Review of draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-28
review-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-28-rtgdir-lc-hares-2024-06-11-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 29)
Type Last Call Review
Team Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir)
Deadline 2024-06-06
Requested 2024-05-16
Requested by Jim Guichard
Authors Young Lee , Dhruv Dhody , Daniele Ceccarelli , Igor Bryskin , Bin Yeong Yoon
I-D last updated 2024-06-11
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -25 by Behcet Sarikaya (diff)
Yangdoctors Last Call review of -24 by Andy Bierman (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -28 by Susan Hares (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -26 by Shivan Kaul Sahib (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -26 by Bo Wu (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -22 by Darren Dukes (diff)
Yangdoctors Early review of -10 by Andy Bierman (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Susan Hares
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang by Routing Area Directorate Assigned
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/rtg-dir/vzZCJWCvgXp5rpIuU_vGHCZPqnc
Reviewed revision 28 (document currently at 29)
Result Has nits
Completed 2024-06-11
review-ietf-teas-actn-vn-yang-28-rtgdir-lc-hares-2024-06-11-00
Status: 
General Comment: Thank you for your careful work on this document. 
Ready with Editorial Nits: 

#1 page 25 - add period to sentence 

     identity vn-computation-error-not-ready {
       base vn-computation-error-reason;
       description
         "VN computation has failed because the MDSC is not
          ready";
     }

#2 Security section: Grammar 
Old/
   *  ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
      the access points in the VN service are attached.   /
New:/ 
   *  ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
      the access points in the VN service are attached.   /

Old:/
   *  vn-ap: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences
      how the VN service is delivered. /
New:/
   *  vn-ap: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences
      how the VN service is delivered.
/
Old:/
   *  vn: this list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
      the VN service is delivered.  By accessing the following data
      nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./
New:/
   *  vn: This list includes a set of sensitive data that influences how
      the VN service is delivered.  By accessing the following data
      nodes, an attacker may be able to manipulate the VN./
Old:/
   *  vn-member: this list includes a set of sensitive data that
      influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered.  By
      accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to
      manipulate the VN member./
New:/
   *  vn-member: This list includes a set of sensitive data that
      influences how the VN member in the VN service is delivered.  By
      accessing the following data nodes, an attacker may be able to
      manipulate the VN member./