Last Call Review of draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01
review-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01-genart-lc-yee-2015-09-28-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements |
|---|---|---|
| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 02) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2015-09-30 | |
| Requested | 2015-09-17 | |
| Authors | Andrew G. Malis , Brian J. Wilson , George Clapp , Vishnu Shukla | |
| I-D last updated | 2015-09-28 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -01
by Peter E. Yee
(diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -01 by Sam Hartman (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Peter E. Yee |
| State | Completed | |
| Request | Last Call review on draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
| Reviewed revision | 01 (document currently at 02) | |
| Result | Ready w/nits | |
| Completed | 2015-09-28 |
review-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01-genart-lc-yee-2015-09-28-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. For more information, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-teas-fast-lsps-requirements-01 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: Sep-28-2015 IETF LC End Date: Sep-30-2015 IESG Telechat date: Sep-30-2015 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as an Informational RFC, but has a nit that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with nits] The draft discusses requirements that apply to the expedited setup of GMPLS LSPs in scenarios that may have high churn. The text can be a bit dense in the descriptive sections, but the requirements are easily understood. Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits: Page 2, Section 1, 2nd paragraph, 1st sentence: delete the commas following “setup” and “blocking”. Page 3, 1st partial paragraph, 1st full sentence: change “set up” to “setup”. Page 3, 2nd full paragraph, 1st sentence: delete “intends to”. Change “present” to “presents”. Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “sub-wavelength”. Page 3, Section 2, 1st paragraph, 3rd sentence: delete the comma after “requirements”. Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 1st sentence: change the first “setup” to “set up”. Page 4, Section 3, item 2, 3rd sentence: delete “a” before “packet-only”. Page 4, Section 3, 2nd paragraph after items, 2nd sentence: append a comma after “e.g.”. Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st paragraph: change the space after performance to a hyphen. Page 5, Section 4.1, 1st item: change “rate” to “rates” and both occurrences of “request” to “requests”. Page 6, Section 5, 3rd sentence: delete “be”. Page 6, item R3: insert “the” before “number”. Page 7, item R8: append a comma after “e.g.”.