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Request Review of draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate
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Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2020-11-30
Requested 2020-11-09
Authors Kathleen Moriarty, Stephen Farrell
Draft last updated 2020-11-25
Completed reviews Secdir Last Call review of -09 by Adam Montville (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -09 by Mohit Sethi (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -09 by Nagendra Nainar (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Mohit Sethi 
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09-genart-lc-sethi-2020-11-25
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Review completed: 2020-11-25

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review-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09-genart-lc-sethi-2020-11-25

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-oldversions-deprecate-09
Reviewer: Mohit Sethi
Review Date: 2020-11-25
IETF LC End Date: 2020-11-30
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: This document deprecates older versions of TLS and DTLS. It also updates many RFCs that normatively refer to the older TLS/DTLS versions. 

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: In section 1.1, typo in "waas defined to detect". 

Most references to RFCs are of the form "[RFC7507]". Can we change "RFC 7457 [RFC7457]" to "[RFC7457]" for uniformity. Similarly, perhaps you could change "RFC5246 [RFC5246]" and "RFC4346 [RFC4346]" to "[RFC5246]" and "[RFC4346]".

In section 2 "NIST for example have provided " should be "..has provided...".

In section 6 "this document is called out specifically to update text implementing the deprecation  recommendations of this document." I was initially confused with the repeated usage of "this". Perhaps it would help to be more explicit.