Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05
review-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05-genart-lc-shirazipour-2019-09-06-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tls-sni-encryption
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 05)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2019-09-02
Requested 2019-08-19
Draft last updated 2019-09-06
Completed reviews Opsdir Last Call review of -05 by Dan Romascanu
Genart Last Call review of -05 by Meral Shirazipour
Assignment Reviewer Meral Shirazipour
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05-genart-lc-shirazipour-2019-09-06
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/G3ESMJPNBSjEs2RS1bO9O8mVZhA
Reviewed rev. 05
Review result Ready
Review completed: 2019-09-06

Review
review-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05-genart-lc-shirazipour-2019-09-06

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Document: draft-ietf-tls-sni-encryption-05
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2019-09-02
IETF LC End Date: 2019-09-02
IESG Telechat date: NA


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as an Informational RFC.
Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
Some may have already been reported…

-[Page 2], Section 1, "colocated"--->"collocated"

-[Page 3], Section 2, "mutiple"---->"multiple"

-[Page 3], Section 2.1, "fradulent"---->"fraudulent"

-[Page 4], Section 2.1, "MITM inspection", please spell out Man-In-The-Middle attack at first use

-[Page 7], Section 3.6, "is the the"---->"is the"

-[Page 10], Section 4.2, "ferver"---->"server"




Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
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