Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02
review-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02-genart-lc-taylor-2015-03-30-00
| Request | Review of | draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 03) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
| Deadline | 2015-03-30 | |
| Requested | 2015-03-19 | |
| Authors | Richard Barnes , Martin Thomson , Alfredo Pironti , Adam Langley | |
| Draft last updated | 2015-03-30 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -02
by
Tom Taylor
(diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -02 by Fred Baker (diff) |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | Tom Taylor |
| State | Completed | |
| Review |
review-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02-genart-lc-taylor-2015-03-30
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| Reviewed revision | 02 (document currently at 03) | |
| Result | Ready with Nits | |
| Completed | 2015-03-30 |
review-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02-genart-lc-taylor-2015-03-30-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-tls-sslv3-diediedie-02 Reviewer: Tom Taylor Review Date: 29 Mar 2015 IETF LC End Date: 30 Mar 20154 IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: This document is good to go subject to the resolution of nits. Note normative downrefs to Informational RFC 4492 and Historic RFC 6101. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: 1. IDNits has a number of complaints that should be resolved: -- the UPDATES mentions RFC 5246 but it is not identified in the Abstract. Rather, "the TLS RFCs" are cited. Could I suggest adding "and explicitly RFC 5246" after that phrase. I can see where adding the others would get into a bit of a mess because they are obsoleted. -- a second IDNits complaint relates to missing RFC 2119 boilerplate. -- finally, there are several complaints about references, at least one of which is readily fixable. -- the other complaints relate to references. 2. Editorial style: Introduction first sentence: I'd suggest moving the phrase "since it was released in 1996" to the beginning of the sentence, followed by a comma. 3. Incomplete thought: Introduction final sentence: OLD SSLv3 now follows. NEW This view is now extended to include SSLv3.