Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tram-turn-mobility-03
review-ietf-tram-turn-mobility-03-genart-lc-resnick-2016-08-08-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tram-turn-mobility
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 09)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2016-08-11
Requested 2016-07-28
Authors Tirumaleswar Reddy.K , Dan Wing , Prashanth Patil , Paal-Erik Martinsen
I-D last updated 2016-08-08
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -03 by Pete Resnick (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Pete Resnick (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -02 by David Waltermire (diff)
Rtgdir Early review of -03 by Tony Przygienda (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Pete Resnick
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-tram-turn-mobility by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 03 (document currently at 09)
Result Ready w/issues
Completed 2016-08-08
review-ietf-tram-turn-mobility-03-genart-lc-resnick-2016-08-08-00
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Document: draft-ietf-tram-turn-mobility-03
Reviewer: Pete Resnick
Review Date: 2016-08-08
IETF LC End Date: 2016-08-11
IESG Telechat date: Unknown

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has some
minor issues and nits that should be fixed before publication.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

3.1.2 - Change "MUST" to "will" both times in the second paragraph. The
last sentence of the section I don't understand; it doesn't seem to have
any interoperability implications, and I don't see why the client can't
examine the ticket in any way it wants. Either justify the sentence or
delete it.

3.2.2 - Change "may" to "MAY" in the sixth paragraph. That *is* a
protocol option being described there.

Nits/editorial comments:

3.1.4 - Change "MAY" to "can" in the second paragraph. I'd also split
that sentence into two sentences as the first half has nothing to do
with the second half.

3.2.1 - The last sentence of 3.2.1 is confusing until you read 3.2.2 and
3.2.3. I would simply delete the sentence. I don't think it adds
anything.

3.4 - Put the "TBD" in there so that the RFC Editor can update.

4 - Put a note to the RFC Editor here to update sections 3.1.4 and 3.4
with the error number. That will make sure it gets updated properly.

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