Last Call Review of draft-ietf-tram-turn-server-discovery-07
review-ietf-tram-turn-server-discovery-07-opsdir-lc-hares-2016-08-24-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-tram-turn-server-discovery
Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 12)
Type Last Call Review
Team Ops Directorate (opsdir)
Deadline 2016-08-30
Requested 2016-08-01
Draft last updated 2016-08-24
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -07 by Ralph Droms (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -09 by Ralph Droms (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -07 by Brian Weis (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -07 by Susan Hares (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Susan Hares
State Completed
Review review-ietf-tram-turn-server-discovery-07-opsdir-lc-hares-2016-08-24
Reviewed rev. 07 (document currently at 12)
Review result Has Nits
Review completed: 2016-08-24

Review
review-ietf-tram-turn-server-discovery-07-opsdir-lc-hares-2016-08-24

-------- Forwarded Message --------
Subject: 	Please Forward this OPS-DIR review
Date: 	Wed, 17 Aug 2016 17:11:39 -0400
From: 	Susan Hares <susaha1 at mail.regent.edu>
To: 	joel jaeggli <joelja at bogus.com>, Benoit Claise (bclaise)
<bclaise at cisco.com>, praspati at cisco.com, tireddy at cisco.com, dwing at cisco.com



My normal mail address (shares at ndzh.com <

mailto:shares

 at ndzh.com>) has an
outage due to a storm in Michigan.   I am sending this via my University
email. 

Could you please forward this OPS-DIR review to OPS-DIR?  

Sue 

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draft-iet-tram-turn-discovery

Status: Ready for Publication, nits 

Comment: Thank you for a well-written draft.  

The security section provides the necessary warnings for this work.  In
the end, the deployments must implement the security.   The Standard
tools should provide the necessary query mechanisms since you are using
DHCP, DNS Service Discovery, and Anycast.  If implementations have any
syslog or other reporting for systems violating this security, this will
provide was to track this information. 

 In the future, the webrtc - might new syslog and pub/sub work from
NETCONF  (PUSH reports) to report the security errors.   Since it is
upcoming work, I have not suggested it to 

A few editorial nits are below. 

Editorial NIts: 

1) section 3, page 3, paragraph 1, sentence 1

OLD:/ TURN clients, by default, discover TURN servers(s) by means of
local or manual TURN configuration i.e., TURN servers configured at the
system level. 
/
NEW /
TURN clients, by default, discover TURN servers(s) by means of local or
manual TURN configuration (i.e., TURN servers configured at the system
level).  

2) section 3, page 3-4, 

This sentence is confusing in the "or on top..." clause.  I've suggested
text below - but anything you can do to clarify will satisfy this nit. 

Old/ A client can choose auto-discovery in the absence of local
configuration, 
if the local configuration doesn't work, or on top of local configuration.
/
New /A client can choose auto-discovery in the absence of local
configuration 
if the local configuration does work, or choose auto-discovery on top of the
local configuration./
 
3) section 4.1.1, page 5, paragraph 1, sentence 4

Old /name option; While/ 
new/name option; while/ 

I believe grammar rules will require the second part of the sentence
start without a capital. 


4) section 5 DNS service, page 8, paragraph 3, 

Old/"_turnserver._udp", "_turnserver._tcp". /
New/"_turnserver.udp", or "_turnserver._tcp"/

5) section 9, paragraph 1, sentence 1. 

It might be useful to have STUN reference in this sentence. 

6) page 12 section 9.3, last sentence. 

Your statement on BGP is correct. You do not need to change it. 

Did you want to also include BGP Flow specification filters?   

Sue Hares