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Last Call Review of draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13
review-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13-rtgdir-lc-robles-2017-12-11-00

Request Review of draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 25)
Type Last Call Review
Team Routing Area Directorate (rtgdir)
Deadline 2017-12-04
Requested 2017-11-06
Requested by Alvaro Retana
Authors Kathleen Moriarty , Al Morton
Draft last updated 2017-12-11
Completed reviews Secdir Telechat review of -09 by Rifaat Shekh-Yusef (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -10 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -13 by Ines Robles (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -13 by Joe Clarke (diff)
Genart Last Call review of -13 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Secdir Last Call review of -13 by Rifaat Shekh-Yusef (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -15 by Meral Shirazipour (diff)
Comments
If extra time is needed, this document will probably be on the Dec/14 Telechat, so we can extend until Dec/12.
Assignment Reviewer Ines Robles
State Completed
Review review-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13-rtgdir-lc-robles-2017-12-11
Reviewed revision 13 (document currently at 25)
Result Ready
Completed 2017-12-11
review-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13-rtgdir-lc-robles-2017-12-11-00
RtgDir review: draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13.txt

Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft. The
Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related drafts as
they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and sometimes on special
request. The purpose of the review is to provide assistance to the Routing ADs.
For more information about the Routing Directorate, please see
​http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDir

Although these comments are primarily for the use of the Routing ADs, it would
be helpful if you could consider them along with any other IETF Last Call
comments that you receive, and strive to resolve them through discussion or by
updating the draft.

Document: Effect of Pervasive Encryption on Operators -
draft-mm-wg-effect-encrypt-13 Reviewer: Ines Robles Review Date: 12-11-2017
Intended status: Informational

Summary:
This document discusses current security and network management practices to
help guide protocol development in support of manageable, secure networks.

The draft is ready, few typos found.

Comments:

I believe the draft is technically good. This document is well written and
clear to understand.

Major Issues:

No major issues found.

Minor Issues:

Section 2:

"... Following the Snowden revelations,..." => It would be nice to add some
references here

Section 2.2.5:
"DRM..."=> I would expand it to  Digital Rights Management (DRM)

Section 6:

inlcudes=> includes

Section 6.1:
"information For example" => period missing?

Section 6.2:
"soltuions" -> solutions

Section 7.1 title:
"Encypted" => Encrypted