Last Call Review of draft-rsalz-2028bis-05
review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04-00
| Request | Review of | draft-rsalz-2028bis |
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| Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 07) | |
| Type | Last Call Review | |
| Team | Transport Area Review Team (tsvart) | |
| Deadline | 2022-03-07 | |
| Requested | 2022-02-09 | |
| Requested by | Lars Eggert | |
| Authors | Rich Salz | |
| Draft last updated | 2022-03-04 | |
| Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -05
by
Vijay K. Gurbani
(diff)
Iotdir Last Call review of -05 by Ted Lemon (diff) Rtgdir Last Call review of -05 by Sasha Vainshtein (diff) Tsvart Last Call review of -05 by David L. Black (diff) I18ndir Last Call review of -05 by John R. Levine (diff) |
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| Comments |
We're trying to maximize the reviews for documents associated with the change in the RFC Editor model. Hence the request to review these pretty short documents, even though they may not need a review from a technical perspective. |
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| Assignment | Reviewer | David L. Black |
| State | Completed | |
| Review |
review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04
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| Posted at | https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/9lgROtE1wmDP2SogK3yXr_vOoOE | |
| Reviewed revision | 05 (document currently at 07) | |
| Result | Ready with Nits | |
| Completed | 2022-03-04 |
review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04-00
This document has been reviewed as part of the transport area review team's ongoing effort to review key IETF documents. These comments were written primarily for the transport area directors, but are copied to the document's authors and WG to allow them to address any issues raised and also to the IETF discussion list for information. When done at the time of IETF Last Call, the authors should consider this review as part of the last-call comments they receive. Please always CC tsv-art@ietf.org if you reply to or forward this review. This draft updates the descriptions of the individuals and organizations involved in the IETF standards process. As a process document, it does not raise any transport-related technical issues, but I did note one overall concern that needs attention. Section 2 is written entirely in the singular about individuals, the Document Editor or Author, the Working Group Chair and the Area Director. Many IETF documents have more than one author or editor, and most IETF working groups have more than one chair - sections 2.1 and 2.2 should be revised and retitled to reflect that. Section 2.3 is correctly singular, because it is about the Responsible Area Director - I recommend changing its title to "The Responsible Area Director". It would be helpful for Section 3 to note that with the exception of the General Area, each Area usually has more than one AD.