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Last Call Review of draft-rsalz-2028bis-05
review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04-00

Request Review of draft-rsalz-2028bis
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 07)
Type Last Call Review
Team Transport Area Review Team (tsvart)
Deadline 2022-03-07
Requested 2022-02-09
Requested by Lars Eggert
Authors Rich Salz
Draft last updated 2022-03-04
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -05 by Vijay K. Gurbani (diff)
Iotdir Last Call review of -05 by Ted Lemon (diff)
Rtgdir Last Call review of -05 by Sasha Vainshtein (diff)
Tsvart Last Call review of -05 by David L. Black (diff)
I18ndir Last Call review of -05 by John R. Levine (diff)
Comments
We're trying to maximize the reviews for documents associated with the change in the RFC Editor model. Hence the request to review these pretty short documents, even though they may not need a review from a technical perspective.
Assignment Reviewer David L. Black
State Completed
Review review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/tsv-art/9lgROtE1wmDP2SogK3yXr_vOoOE
Reviewed revision 05 (document currently at 07)
Result Ready with Nits
Completed 2022-03-04
review-rsalz-2028bis-05-tsvart-lc-black-2022-03-04-00
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This draft updates the descriptions of the individuals and organizations
involved in the IETF standards process.  As a process document, it does
not raise any transport-related technical issues, but I did note one overall
concern that needs attention.

Section 2 is written entirely in the singular about individuals, the Document
Editor or Author, the Working Group Chair and the Area Director.  Many IETF
documents have more than one author or editor, and most IETF working groups
have more than one chair - sections 2.1 and 2.2 should be revised and retitled to
reflect that.  Section 2.3 is correctly singular, because it is about the Responsible
Area Director - I recommend changing its title to "The Responsible Area Director".

It would be helpful for Section 3 to note that with the exception of the General
Area, each Area usually has more than one AD.