Last Call Review of draft-templin-intarea-seal-51
review-templin-intarea-seal-51-genart-lc-holmberg-2013-02-19-00

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Document:                    draft-templin-intarea-seal-51.txt



Reviewer:                     Christer Holmberg



Review Date:                 19 Feb 2013



IETF LC End Date:        20 Feb 2013



IETF Telechat Date:       21 Feb 2013



Summary:  The draft is well written, but with some editorial comments that I
suggest to be addressed before publication.

Major Issues: None

Minor Issues: None



Editorial nits: See below



Q_ED_1: Most of the text in the Abstract section does not belong there. The
section should talk about what the document does, and not define what a
subnetwork is etc. Only the last sentence talks about what the draft is about.



Q_ED_2: In the Introduction section, I would suggest to add a reference for IP
encapsulating/tunneling. RFC 2003 is referenced later in the document, but I
think it would be good to have something also in the Introduction.



Q_ED_3: In section 1.2, do you need to define ‘subnetwork’ here? Isn’t it
better to have the definition in one single place – the Terminology section?



Q_ED_4: In section 12, there seems to be a dot too much

J



Best regards,



Christer