Last Call Review of draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06
review-wilde-service-link-rel-06-genart-lc-yee-2018-11-20-00

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Requested rev. no specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2018-11-20
Requested 2018-10-23
Other Reviews Secdir Last Call review of -06 by Stefan Santesson (diff)
Opsdir Last Call review of -10 by Tim Chown
Genart Telechat review of -08 by Peter Yee (diff)
Review State Completed
Reviewer Peter Yee
Review review-wilde-service-link-rel-06-genart-lc-yee-2018-11-20
Posted at https://mailarchive.ietf.org/arch/msg/gen-art/Xz-VPDApQkVnla9kiFE1_ruX0Kw
Reviewed rev. 06 (document currently at 10)
Review result Almost Ready
Draft last updated 2018-11-20
Review completed: 2018-11-20

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review-wilde-service-link-rel-06-genart-lc-yee-2018-11-20

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Document: draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2018-11-20
IETF LC End Date: 2018-11-20
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:  Almost ready.  The document registers (under the RFC 8288 registry) link relation types for service document, service description, service metadata, and service status.  It's missing a key section.

Major issues: None.

Minor issues:

Page 8, Section 7: RFC 2223 requires you do more than provide an ellipsis here.  You might want to consider what makes sense.  Perhaps a discussion of what happens to a client that obtains a maliciously formatted service-desc or even an errant service-desc.  While a human might be able to see through problems in a "service-doc", it's quite possible that a machine will want to take precautions about handling the received data and acting upon it.

Nits/editorial comments: 

Page 1, Note to Readers: Presumably this section will be removed prior to publication.

Page 3, 4th full paragraph, 1st sentence: Delete the comma after "consumption" and delete the "for" following that.

Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 1st section: change "of" to "between".  Put the section references in parentheses.

Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "a" before "better".