Last Call Review of draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-
review-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-genart-lc-even-2012-07-15-00
Request | Review of | draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 04) | |
Type | Last Call Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2012-07-13 | |
Requested | 2012-06-22 | |
Authors | Paul E. Hoffman | |
I-D last updated | 2012-07-15 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -??
by Roni Even
Secdir Last Call review of -?? by Taylor Yu |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Roni Even |
State | Completed | |
Request | Last Call review on draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Completed | 2012-07-15 |
review-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-genart-lc-even-2012-07-15-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-hoffman-tao-as-web-page-02 Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date:2012–6–28 IETF LC End Date: 2012–7–13 IESG Telechat date: Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: In the section 2 the second sentence is “The initial content for the Tao web page will come from the last Internet-Draft that was meant to replace RFC 4677.”. I was wondering if this information is important to this document when published. If it is maybe rephrase it to “ The initial content for the Tao web page is based on the last Internet-Draft that was meant to replace RFC 4677”. I also suggest that maybe it will be good to have an informative reference to it. Nits/editorial comments: 1. Section 1 second paragraph “led” instead of “lead” 2. Section 2 third paragraph “proposed” instead of “propsed”