Last Call Review of draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-19
review-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-19-rtgdir-lc-leymann-2022-12-12-00

Hello,

I have been selected as the Routing Directorate reviewer for this draft.
The Routing Directorate seeks to review all routing or routing-related
drafts as they pass through IETF last call and IESG review, and
sometimes on special request. The purpose of the review is to provide
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Directorate, please see https://trac.ietf.org/trac/rtg/wiki/RtgDir
This is the second review from Routing Directorate.

Overall I think the draft is ready for publication but there a still
a few nits.

This review takes place in support of CCAMP working group last call.

Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-l1csm-yang-19
Reviewer: Nicolai Leymann
Review Date: 09 December 2022
IETF LC End Date: Not yet started
Intended Status: Draft Standard

Nits:
either "Layer 1" or "layer 1" should be used consistently throughout the
document: - Page 5, First sentence:
  "The benefit is that the same layer 1 transport network resources are"
- Page 6,
  "The L1CSM YANG data model describes the layer 1 connectivity services"
References to "RFCXXX", "RFC XXX" and "RFCYYY" need to be fixed.
- (In some cases there is a comment that this needs to be updated but not not
in all cases. E.g., Page 9)

Page 6, Table has no caption, References need to be fixed ("RFCXXX"/"[RFCYYY]")

Some of the comments from Adrians review (e.g., use of "P" as Protcol but also
in different context in Figues are not addressed (yet)).