Last Call Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24
review-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24-genart-lc-moriarty-2013-11-18-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 26)
Type Last Call Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2013-11-04
Requested 2013-10-21
Authors Roy T. Fielding , Yves Lafon , Julian Reschke
I-D last updated 2013-11-18
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -24 by Kathleen Moriarty (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -25 by Kathleen Moriarty (diff)
Opsdir Telechat review of -24 by Menachem Dodge (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Kathleen Moriarty
State Completed
Request Last Call review on draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 24 (document currently at 26)
Result Ready
Completed 2013-11-18
review-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24-genart-lc-moriarty-2013-11-18-00
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Document: draft-ietf-httpbis-p5-range-24
Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty
Review Date: November 18, 2013
IETF LC End Date: End of November
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: The draft is ready with nits to resolve.  The run-on sentences need to
be corrected to make the draft easier to read.  I called out a few examples,
however, there are many more in the draft.  I reviewed this a couple of weeks
ago, before -25 was released and am working my way through all of the documents.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Please go through the draft in detail and break up run-on sentences into
multiple sentences where possible.

Section 3.2: At end of second to last paragraph, remove parenthesis around full
sentence.

Section 4.2: Please break first sentence into multiple.
Section 4.3 - 4th paragraph really needs to be broken into multiple sentences.