Telechat Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-etree-frwk-07
review-ietf-l2vpn-etree-frwk-07-genart-telechat-campbell-2014-08-08-00

Request Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-etree-frwk
Requested revision No specific revision (document currently at 10)
Type Telechat Review
Team General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart)
Deadline 2014-08-05
Requested 2014-07-31
Authors Raymond Key , Lucy Yong , Simon DeLord , Frederic JOUNAY , Lizhong Jin
I-D last updated 2014-08-08
Completed reviews Genart Last Call review of -06 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Genart Telechat review of -07 by Ben Campbell (diff)
Assignment Reviewer Ben Campbell
State Completed
Request Telechat review on draft-ietf-l2vpn-etree-frwk by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned
Reviewed revision 07 (document currently at 10)
Result Ready
Completed 2014-08-08
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Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-etree-frwk-07
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2014-08-05
IETF LC End Date: 2014-07-15
IESG Telechat date: 2014-08-07

Summary: Ready for publication as informational. All of the substantive
comments from my last call review of version 06 have been addressed.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

None

Nits/editorial comments:

-- References: 2119 language has been removed, but there's still a reference to
RFC 2119.

-- 2.2, 4th paragraph: Furthermore, MEF also defines AC roles...

This draft defines the AC roles in the terminology section. It would be helpful
to mention if the MEF definitions are the same as used here, either in this
section or in the respective terminology section entries.

-- 5.1, 1st sentence:

The change due to one of my previous comments renders the beginning of the
sentence as " "IP/MPLS L2VPN architecture has no distinction role on Attachment
   Circuit ..." Should "distinction" be "distinctive"? If not, I'm not sure how
   to parse the sentence.