Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ippm-pam-08
review-ietf-ippm-pam-08-intdir-telechat-muite-2023-11-22-00

I am an assigned INT directorate reviewer for <draft-ietf-ippm-pam>. These
comments were written primarily for the benefit of the Internet Area Directors.
Document editors and shepherd(s) should treat these comments just like they
would treat comments from any other IETF contributors and resolve them along
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Based on my review, if I was on the IESG I would ballot this document as YES.

The main aim of this informational draft is to introduce sampling of traffic
flows to enable data reductions that make it feasible to check the quality of
service, in particular by enabling checks on the number of packets delivered
within a suitably defined time interval.  The notion that is introduced seems
useful for a flow between two specified points.  It does not seem to impact any
INT directorate related areas directly, though any resulting measurement
techniques that are developed may be very useful, for example when comparing IPv4
and IPv6.


The following are minor issues (typos, misspelling, minor text improvements) with
the document:

a) The term precision availability metrics may be misleading, since counts are
aggregated over a specified time interval. Maybe something like "Aggregated
Availability Metrics" could be used instead?  There is a loss of precision since
information about each packet is not recorded, but the resulting data reduction
makes this concept useful.

b) At the beginning of section 3, it may be helpful to first introduce the
notions of violated and severely violated, and then apply these to intervals and
packet counts.  Alternatively, clear definitions could be given for the
violated and severely violated packet counts.  One thing that is unclear is if
the violated and severely violated packet counts apply to a single specified
time interval, or are aggregated over multiple time intervals.

c) Section 3.3 introduces a new topic, available and unavailable states. How
this might be implemented is not fully specified.  It may be helpful to combine
this with section 4, a section on possible extensions, as perhaps section 4.1,
with material on possible statistical SLOs as 4.2. Both these sections could
perhaps also be shortened and added as further bullet points in section 6.