Telechat Review of draft-ietf-core-http-mapping-15
review-ietf-core-http-mapping-15-genart-telechat-dupont-2016-10-10-00
Request | Review of | draft-ietf-core-http-mapping |
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Requested revision | No specific revision (document currently at 17) | |
Type | Telechat Review | |
Team | General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) (genart) | |
Deadline | 2016-10-11 | |
Requested | 2016-09-29 | |
Authors | Angelo P. Castellani , Salvatore Loreto , Akbar Rahman , Thomas Fossati , Esko Dijk | |
I-D last updated | 2016-10-10 | |
Completed reviews |
Genart Last Call review of -12
by Francis Dupont
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Genart Telechat review of -14 by Francis Dupont (diff) Genart Telechat review of -15 by Francis Dupont (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -12 by Dacheng Zhang (diff) Opsdir Last Call review of -12 by Menachem Dodge (diff) Secdir Last Call review of -17 by Dacheng Zhang Opsdir Telechat review of -17 by Susan Hares |
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Assignment | Reviewer | Francis Dupont |
State | Completed | |
Request | Telechat review on draft-ietf-core-http-mapping by General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) Assigned | |
Reviewed revision | 15 (document currently at 17) | |
Result | Ready | |
Completed | 2016-10-10 |
review-ietf-core-http-mapping-15-genart-telechat-dupont-2016-10-10-00
I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-core-http-mapping-13.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20160829 IETF LC End Date: 20160822 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - Abstract page 1: please expand the CoAP abbrev at first use. - ToC page 3 and 11 page 29: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments - 1 page 3: again please expand the CoAP abbrev at first use. - 3 page 6, 5.4.2 page 12, 5.5 page 13, and 7 note 4 page 22: i.e. -> i.e., - 5.3 page 9 (twice), 5.4.2 page 12, 6.2 page 16, 6.2 page 17 (3 times), 6.6 Fig 2 page 19, 7 note 7 page 22, 8.3 page 24, and 10.2 page 28: e.g. -> e.g., - 5.4.1.1 page 10: IMHO the 1. Target CoAP URI ... should be on the next page (BTW leave this to the RFC Editor). - 5.4.2.1 page 12: same comment about "2. Target CoAP URI ..." - 5.4.2.1 page 13: perhaps a missing "on" at the end of: http://p.example.com/hc/?s=coap&hp=s.example.com&p=/light&q= Regards Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr