Last Call Review of draft-ietf-homenet-front-end-naming-delegation-18
review-ietf-homenet-front-end-naming-delegation-18-genart-lc-holmberg-2022-10-04-00

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Document: draft-ietf-homenet-front-end-naming-delegation-18
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2022-10-04
IETF LC End Date: 2022-10-04
IESG Telechat date: 2022-10-20

Summary:

Since the topic is outside the area of my expertise, I have no technical
comments. I do think the document is a little difficult to read. Below I have a
couple of editorial comments, and I think addressing those could improve the
readability of the document.

Major issues: N/A

Minor issues: N/A

Nits/editorial comments:

Q1:

In my opinion the Introduction section is too long, and goes into too many
details. There are also things which I don't think belong to the Introduction.

For example, I don't think the text in Section 1.1 belongs to the Introduction,
and is not needed in order to get an overview of the mechanism. I think it
belongs to a separate section (perhaps an Appendix). The same applies to
Section 1.3.

Similarly, Section 1.2 seems to talk about alternative solutions, before the
solution in the draft has been clearly explained. I think it should be a
separate section, later in the document.

Q2:

It is quite difficult to get a picture of how the mechanism work. There are no
examples, or step-by-step functionality/use-case descriptions. Also, Section
3.1 seems to be a mixture of architecture and functionality, which is a little
confusing.